Teacher Comments

Further to our conversation in class yesterday, you have already taken forward many of the action points that came out of it, but just as a reminder they were:

- Create a new music track in Garageband
- Continue editing for the final cut taking care to do the following: break up the overly long shots of the title cards and the two central characters, and intercut these segments so that you achieve regular and appropriately paced parallel editing between the title cards and the main action.
- Either by using existing footage (or maybe by re-shooting?), try to 'establish' the interior of the classroom containing your two central characters before you cut to the aerial shot of Ollie asleep on the desk. This will provide better spatial awareness for your audience and contextualise the space and place that the following action will play out.